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Skeleton rhyme
« on: October 20, 2012, 11:57 AM »
I need a word that can have something to do with a skeleton and rhymes with blue. Any ideas?

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Re: Skeleton rhyme
« Reply #1 on: October 20, 2012, 01:25 PM »
could something be askew? Or bats flew, or something taboo or new or true. If it's silly, maybe he could be out past his curfew. He's a bag of bones without a sinew. Maybe he's a skeleton from a curse of voodoo. He could have a graveyard point of view. Perhaps he tasted a witch's brew. Maybe you could end the line with only a few, something he can't do, a pair of two.

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Re: Skeleton rhyme
« Reply #2 on: October 20, 2012, 01:38 PM »
A bag of bones with no sinew! Perfect! Thanks.

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Re: Skeleton rhyme
« Reply #3 on: October 20, 2012, 03:11 PM »
The tough thing about "sinew" is that the stress naturally falls on the first syllable.  So if you're wanting it to rhyme with "blue," then the reader has to force the stress on the second syllable.  Forcing meter is generally frowned upon by editors, so you might want to try out a few alternatives.  Just my two cents.

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Re: Skeleton rhyme
« Reply #4 on: October 20, 2012, 05:09 PM »
If you don't have a rhyming dictionary, it's well worth getting one. I use The New Comprehensive American Rhyming Dictionary, but there are others out there.

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Re: Skeleton rhyme
« Reply #5 on: October 20, 2012, 05:14 PM »
I could not rhyme without RHYMEZONE!!!  Check it out. It's awesome. One of my editors introduced me to it, and never stopped using it since.

http://www.rhymezone.com/

And I agree with Wolfie about the awkward stress. And "sinew" is not really a kid friendly word,... if we're talking pb's, imo.


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Re: Skeleton rhyme
« Reply #6 on: October 20, 2012, 05:23 PM »
Rhymezone is my rhyming savior as well (and sometimes, so is Wolfie, come to think of it).
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Re: Skeleton rhyme
« Reply #7 on: October 20, 2012, 06:00 PM »
Thanks guys. I ended up using "a bone askew", which worked well. I will have to check out that sight! Thanks for the heads up.

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Re: Skeleton rhyme
« Reply #8 on: October 20, 2012, 06:14 PM »
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Rhymezone is my rhyming savior as well (and sometimes, so is Wolfie, come to think of it).

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Re: Skeleton rhyme
« Reply #9 on: October 21, 2012, 08:03 AM »
I use rhymezone, too, but they list near rhymes, so got to be careful. For instance, around and brown are
not true rhymes, but they list it.  Just saying.

Carole  :grin